Tuesday, 3 February 2009

A Tryst..with self...

Transcending from a meadow to gump,
A threshold leading to the core of a dump....
Like stepping from a cathedral into the street
Like a solitary sorrow perpetuating in fleet.....,

I beckoned my metaphysical pest.....
We navigated to re
mote tranquility ...
I saw an invitation for an eternal quest...
Plundered the mystics of her immaculate purity..

The stains in my fabric were then concealed.....
And boundlessness opened, I was retextured
Cascaded into the rivulets where weeds once were.
An evolution...a phase where reality was pictured...

I marvel at the unseen spirits which led...
To reveal the rhetoric of my self unsaid...

11 comments:

Madhumitha said...
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ajay.rao said...

An excellent approach preeti.
From ages, every person on this planet has tried to meet self. But only very few have succeded. And yes it is in nature some one can meet him/her self. Buddha has to take the help of banniyan tree. Bahu bali had to reject all man made things to become Gommata.
Easily your best work so far. Only thing is, Why did you choose to pen a complex subject with even more complex phrases.
Three cheers Girl.
Keep writing.

Amiya chatterjee said...

I really feel unhappy. A photograph of golden autumn, a road leading to an unknown(unknowable) destination ..so SIMPLE
yet the selection of words to exppress the tryst with your self seems so confounded.
SIMPLICITY is the ultimate show of sophistcation.You want the proof? Look again at the photograph with golden leaf.

STALAG SUKHOI said...

going deep into oneself and trying and self analyzing your role in this world leads to a lot of questions ,only a thinker can change his/her destiny .an answer which more often than lot lies in the umpteen questions that come on self introspection

Amiya chatterjee said...

I see Des cartes is long dead but his idea of duality is still groaning: I think therefore I am. We think and "By thinking" we change the universe. But as the universe changes we change too. Because I and the universe are ONE
This is probably the theoy of every thing is trying to say in modern physics.Universe is not out there ,it is right inside me and you and every phenomena , every noumena .Pardon my imbecility gentlemen.

priya said...

loved it....

anudev said...

Hi preeti,

Well, in promulgating your esoteric cogitations and articulating superficial, sentimental and psychological observations, beware of platitudinous ponderosity. Let your extemporaneous decantations and unpremeditated expatiations have intelligibly and veracious veracity without redomontade and thrasonical bombast.

Sedulously avoid all polysyllabic profundity, pusillanimous vacuity, pestiferous profanity and similar transgressions;

which means xpress simply, naturally & do not use big words, though idea is great

rgrds,
ANUDEV M V

Charnita said...

Now that is a beautiful piece of poetry;)!

Preeti Venkateshan said...

Thanks Ajay, Amiya,Chamita, Priya,Sukhoi

Preeti Venkateshan said...
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Preeti Venkateshan said...

Mr Anudev.. I wrote this poem long time ago without hunting for words.. this is how I spoke few years back.. I don't trust big words make me big.. but for me Poetry is expressing what goes on in one's mind and these were the words that came out.. over the years I have moderated Now I dont use big words or speak in the same fashion.. but just because you find few big words.. piling up a chain of sarcasm just to prove your point was uncalled for...Just to impress few people I cannot change the way I write or think.. I am improving as a person as a communicator.. thank you for your words

January 28, 2013 at 8:06 AM